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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.
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The two diagrams below illustrate the degree of employees in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.
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, during
this
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thirty-years
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 period, Germany remained the biggest index on
industry
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the industry
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 in 2010, with all three other countries working much less on them.
However
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, Japan is not that far behind. In the first
chart
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chart,
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 China shows
the
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 high degree of agriculture, other states an insignificant proportion. In 1980 Germany
worked
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spent
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 the least amount of per cent on agriculture,
while
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 the USA and Japan spent about as much as each other.
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, by 2001, the gap in the working industry level was nearly 80%. It is interesting to note that services don't change the indicator, only some degradation. China displays the top indicator in two charts. As can be seen from the graph, a large number of people have to work
ın ındustry
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in industry
 and servıces.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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