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Writing Samples
Band 2

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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Science
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 plays a vital role in
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development
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society
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. It is reported most students were not
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choosing
science
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 during their academic in some countries. To
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about
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the causes and impact of
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science
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society
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, some student
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 not ready to learn
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 because they
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thought
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 subject as
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 has more to study throughout their career. And
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 reason may be the
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 of learning
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science
 and doing higher studies that students aren't consequences.
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, studying
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 is a hard part among
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, as new topics need to be
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over
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cause
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society
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in
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 lack
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doctor
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 rate in development of Research and Development for
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society
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, the effects of learning or choosing
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 as a major in
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career
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society
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 in developing new
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 of sectors like Doctors, Researchers, etc. As a
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 they can treat
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people
 with illness by knowing
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 from their childhood.

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introduction conclusion
Try to clearly state your thesis in the introduction to set a clear direction for your essay. Also, make sure to add a conclusion that wraps up your points and provides a summary.
logical structure
Improve the logical flow of your essay by organizing your ideas better. Consider using more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas, and ensure each paragraph discusses a single main idea.
supported main points
Include more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your main points. This will help demonstrate your ideas more effectively.
complete response
Make sure to fully address both parts of the task by discussing both the causes and effects in depth. This will provide a more comprehensive response to the question.
clear comprehensive ideas
Try to develop your ideas more clearly and comprehensively. Be sure to explain why you think students do not choose science and how this impacts society.
relevant specific examples
Include more relevant and specific examples to illustrate your points and make your essay more convincing.
topic relevance
You selected an important and relevant topic, and you have identified some of the key issues.
topic understanding
Your writing shows an understanding of the importance of science in society and touches on both causes and effects, which is a good approach.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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