You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her

Dear friend Alyssa How are you?it's been a
while
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we haven't met face-to-face.I hope you are doing well.I have been thinking
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you get into a job or get into a college. First of all, college might not be a good idea all the time as it requires a lot of learning but
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they are less focused on
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practical learning but you are the person that can easily learn from doing.
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the schedules of the college might be not suitable for you.
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working might be
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idea ever.First of
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it allows you to gain practical experience and
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you could develop skills.
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,working gives you the chance to meet more people and you could get rid of social anxiety.
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you could easily guide your future decisions by working.
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there might be bad sides
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working.You might end up not getting your salary by the time you should
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if you're absent for
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of days,your boss might end up cutting off your salary.But I don't think it's a big deal if you are going to take
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seriously
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your decision should rely on your interests and thoughts. Best wishes.Your beautiful friend Ravshanova Mushtariy
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coherence cohesion
Try to include a clear and well-structured introduction and conclusion. This will make your letter easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph contains one main idea, and use clear transitions between ideas to enhance readability.
task achievement
Be sure to fully support your points with specific examples or further explanation to strengthen your argument.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend, which enhances the personal touch.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and fitting for a personal letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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