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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides key information about the population under
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the poverity
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poverity
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poverty
 line,
avarge
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average
income
 per person and age in three states in
UNITED
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the UNITED
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 STATES. The
unites
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units
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 are measured in dollars and
persentages
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percentages
.
Overall
,it is clear from the graph that
California
 has a significant number in
income
.
In addition
.
Utal
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Utah
 has 17.000
of
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in
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income
,
whereas
Florida
 has 22.000
of
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in
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income
.
According to
 what is shown,people under 18 in
California
 and
Florida
,
has
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have
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 a similar share, with
California
has
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having
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 17 per cent
while
Florida
 has nearly a quarter. people over 60 years in
Florida
has
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have
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 a significant percentage, with 23 per cent. In terms of
population
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the population
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 under
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the poverity
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poverity
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poverty
 line,
California
showing
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shows
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 less than a fifth proportion.Ulta and
Florida
, accounting for a
fifith
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fifth
 of the total. The average
income
 in Ulta and
Florida
,have
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is
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 40 per person
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, california, florida with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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