The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates a
comparsion
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comparison
of the proportion of work force in different industries in Australia during 1989 and 2008. The data are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, all
industries
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rates experienced a downward trend except manufacturing and
helth
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health
care, they both
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an upward trend.
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, the most significant change can be
obseved
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observed
on manufacturing. In 1989, working
on
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manufacturing was the most popular
between
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among
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the
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employee
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employees
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at exactly
qourter
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quarter
. Retail was on the second rank, at 11.8%, making it slightly more than
helth
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health
care by approximately 2%.
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, tourism and education were relatively low ,they both less than 7%.
Constraction
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Construction
was 7.6%
On the other hand
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, retail and health care were
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top
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the list at 10.1% and 11.3% respectively in 2009. Meanwhile,
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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rate decreased by around 6% to 9.8%,
however
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,
constraction
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construction
rose to 8.3% . Tourism and education roughly had the same they, both around 7 part of handerad.
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