Some people say that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementary schoolsuch as reading,writing and math How far do you agree or disagree?

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On a large scale , perhaps reading and writing and math or even
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look more important and basic than
computer
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, but the
world
has changed today . I can not
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more with
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idea and here is why : Nowadays you have to work with
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and other technology and smart devices from
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wake up until you sleep at night . most of
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are being done remotely using the computers ,
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can save more and lead to less traffic and less air pollution . A lot of jobs themselves are based on
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for
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instance , website and application developers , accountants , banking , all the old
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getting done by computers . I think anyone who does not be
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familiar
with technology working will be
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stuck
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communication
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through the computers and internet . if you want to talk
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family or friends who are far from you , there is no paper
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anymore , you have to use your mobile phone or
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. Maybe all
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people
dont
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don't
want to be a
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specialist
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yet you have to learn the basics of how it works . Recently using
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artifial
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artificial
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a trend in the
world
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think even
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should be added to children's lessons at school .
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, the
world
is going to be a digital
world
with high speed and
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totally
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with teaching
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young people .
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You clearly state your position on the topic, which is important for task achievement.
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You recognize the growing importance of computer skills in various aspects of modern life.
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You provide several arguments for the inclusion of computer skills in primary education.

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