You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, explain that you would like to apply for the job give some details of any relevant experience that you have specify the days and times that would suit you

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing in response to your advertisement which was placed in

the

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apply

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Valley

street

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Street

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dated 17 April 2024 . I would really appreciate it if you spare some of your time

discuss

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to discuss

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about

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apply

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my experience and skills. I am a student right now and a few days ago (17 April)

while

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was walking in the street I purchased a local newspaper and noticed that

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apply

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your local restaurant has a position for

waiter

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the waiter

a waiter

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and it was

part-time

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a part-time

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job,

therefore

I was interested in it , as I have wanted to

work

after my lessons for 2 months.

Firstly

I don't have any experience because I haven't worked anywhere,

however

I have several skills.

For instance

communication

skill

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skills

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, as I like talking with other people and I am

also

well-rounded and I believe I am a strong candidate for

this

position. And I am

driven

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a driven

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and ambitious person who is keen to learn new skills,

therefore

if you give me a chance I'll prove it to you. In the

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advertisement,

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it was

part-time

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a part-time

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job so I wanted to share days and

times

that would suit me. Every day I have lessons between 9

and 2

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the university

after

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and after

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that I have a Spanish course from 2:30

to 4

and I am always free

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until

untill

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until

midnight,

therefore

I would prefer between 4:30

and 10

if you have

times

for these

times

and I can

work

everyday. In the weekends I do not do anything so I can

work

extra

times

. I appreciate your consideration for

this

application and look forward to hearing from you soon Yours faithfully Asadbek

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logical structure

To improve coherence, it's important to maintain a consistent logical structure throughout the letter. Consider using topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to introduce the main idea more clearly.

single idea per paragraph

Ensure that each paragraph deals with a single main idea and that there is a clear separation between different points. This will make the letter easier to follow for the reader.

complete response

The letter responds to all parts of the task, but could be improved by adding more details about your skills and explaining why they are relevant to the waiter's position. This will strengthen the task response.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is mostly suitable for a job application. Be careful with the use of colloquial expressions, such as 'a few days ago' or 'I haven't worked anywhere'; formal alternatives would be more appropriate.

greeting and closing

The letter opens with a clear introduction and closes with a polite sign-off.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

282 words

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