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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel
#information #changes #modes #travel #england #distance #miles #person #year #mode
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illustrated
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 information about transportation methods which were chosen by
the
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humans  for travelling
between
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over
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 the given 15 years in
the
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England.     At a glance, the fraction of
car
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cars
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 was a higher proposition except,
other
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for other
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 transport services  like
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a train
the train
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train
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trains
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, walking, bicycle, local
bus
,
long distance
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long-distance
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bus
,
taxi
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taxis
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 and others, as these figures accounted for
lowest
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the lowest
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.   
To begin
 with, In
the
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1985 year,
car
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the car
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 was  the most preferred transport among other services, which was 3199
person
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people
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 and
also
 it
was
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continuously
increase
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whereas
, In the year 2000, peaked at 4806.
As well as
, other types of
transports
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transport
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 chosen  by people, at the beginning of term, they showed
at
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450 and
increase
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increased
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 again
585
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to 585
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.    Contrary to that, Local
bus
also
 used
to
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by individuals. It faced
at
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apply
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429,
however
,
at
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in
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 the final year,
their
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there
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 figure a decline at 274. Walking, bicycle,
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long-distance
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long distance
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long-distance
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bus
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buses
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,
taxi
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and taxi
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was
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were
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  following  them and their proposition fluctuated  during the times
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • modes of travel
  • average distance
  • per person per year
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change/trend
  • vehicle usage
  • public transportation
  • technological advancements
  • societal changes
  • economic growth
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