A close relative of yours is having a birthday lunch time next week, but you know you will be working. Write a letter to your boss or supervisor to ask for some time off. In your letter, •explain the situation and why you particularly want to attend the lunch •specify the dates, times and amount of time off you will need •offer to work late or come in early another time to make yo for the time

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Dear Mr Michael, I am writing to ask you for some time off.

Due to

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, my close relative who is my auntʼs

daugther

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daughter

is going to

came

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come

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my birthday next week thatʼs way I request you to reply me. Actually, my birthday will be on 15th September but I

decide

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have decided

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to celebrate on 10th September. Because

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of this

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, my auntʼs

daugther

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daughter

is going to leave

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for

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another country with her family

though

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through

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her fatherʼs

work

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and they will

have

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apply

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never

came

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come

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here. So, I invited her to

lunch time

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lunchtime

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next week. I sincerely want to attend, because I may never see her again. I

work

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as a waiter at

the

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restaurant. I am going to ask you for time off which

become

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becomes

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work

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-day on 10th September. Genuinely, I love my job

however

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I can not

work

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this

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day. I really

fell

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felt

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embarrassed

myself

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apply

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. If you allow, I will ask my friend to

work

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for me. Whether

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apply

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you donʼt agree

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this

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with this

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you reduce my salary

that

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so that

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I donʼt

work

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a day. I hope you understand my situation. I will be

greatful

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grateful

if you receive my request. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Raʼno.

omondavlat91Sat Aug 10 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion

Provide a clearer structure by separating your letter into distinct paragraphs for each point you need to cover. This will make your request more logical and easier to follow.

Coherence and Cohesion

Check your sentences for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to improve readability. For instance, 'my close relative who is my auntʼs daughter' can be simplified to 'my cousin.'

Task Achievement

You clearly state the dates and times you need off and the reason why this is important to you.

Task Achievement

Your tone is polite and respectful, which is suitable for a letter to your boss.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

194 words

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