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A close relative of yours is having a birthday lunch time next week, but you know you will be working. Write a letter to your boss or supervisor to ask for some time off. In your letter, •explain the situation and why you particularly want to attend the lunch •specify the dates, times and amount of time off you will need •offer to work late or come in early another time to make yo for the time

#close #birthday #lunch #time #week #boss #supervisor #•explain #situation #•specify #dates #times #amount #•offer #work #yo
Dear Mr Michael, I am writing to ask you for some time off.
Due to
, my close relative who is my auntʼs
daugther
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daughter
 is going to
came
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come
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 my birthday next week thatʼs way I request you to reply me. Actually, my birthday will be on 15th September but I
decide
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 to celebrate on 10th September. Because
of
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of this
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, my auntʼs
daugther
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daughter
 is going to leave
to
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for
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 another country with her family
though
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through
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 her fatherʼs
work
 and they will
have
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apply
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never
came
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come
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 here. So, I invited her to
lunch time
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lunchtime
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 next week. I sincerely want to attend, because I may never see her again. I
work
 as a waiter at
the
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a
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 restaurant. I am going to ask you for time off which
become
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becomes
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work
-day on 10th September. Genuinely, I love my job
however
 I can not
work
this
 day. I really
fell
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felt
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 embarrassed
myself
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apply
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. If you allow, I will ask my friend to
work
 for me. Whether
,
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 you donʼt agree
this
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with this
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 you reduce my salary
that
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so that
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 I donʼt
work
 a day. I hope you understand my situation. I will be
greatful
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grateful
 if you receive my request. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Raʼno.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Provide a clearer structure by separating your letter into distinct paragraphs for each point you need to cover. This will make your request more logical and easier to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check your sentences for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to improve readability. For instance, 'my close relative who is my auntʼs daughter' can be simplified to 'my cousin.'
Task Achievement
You clearly state the dates and times you need off and the reason why this is important to you.
Task Achievement
Your tone is polite and respectful, which is suitable for a letter to your boss.
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