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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three pie charts depict information about the percentage of the yearly coting by six several local authorities in Someland in three different years including 1980, 1990 and 2000.
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, what stands out from the charts is that the highest
proportion
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 of yearly spending was on higher
education
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,
while
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 the lowest
proportion
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 was spent on either environmental services or
other
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. In 1980 and 1990, it can be seen clearly from the charts
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that the biggest
proportion
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 of yearly spending was on higher
education
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, with 35% and 45% in turn.
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,
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 in 1980, the second-biggest
proportion
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 of annual spending was on k-12
education
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, just ahead of transportation, with 25% and 16% respectively, in 1990, both health and human resources and k-12
education
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 were the second-common percentages, with
same
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 number, with 20%. In 2000, more than twice the percentage of health and human resources
was
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accounted
of
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for
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 annual spending of
proportion
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 on transportation, with 22%. 10% of the total
of
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yearly
costing
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 was formed by environmental services and
other
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others
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