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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
map
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 shows how a
village
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 called Ryemouth has evolved from 1995 till present. There have been industrial and residential changes, the most noticeable being the increases in amenities in
this
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 area. In 1995, to the east of the
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village
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village,
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 there was
green
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a green
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 zone featuring farmland and
forest
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a forest
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 park. Next to
this
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 was housing on both sides of the road located in the north-west of the
map
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. Generally speaking, a lot of recreational facilities were situated mostly to the south of the
village
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.
For instance
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, the seaside was the hotspot for residents as it included a place to go shopping and to eat.
Moreover
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, the fishing port was constructed there with the fish market nearby. Turning to the present-day
map
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, it can be seen that the green area is reduced and converted into
sports
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a sports
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 area with a golf course and tennis courts. A
further
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 noticeable change is
development
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the development
a development
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 of the car park on the right side of the hotel so the visitors can travel there
with
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by
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cars
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car
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. The eating spot of the
village
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 is enlarged by developing
restaurant
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a restaurant
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.
Although
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 the old houses remain,
its
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their
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 number significantly
increases
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increased
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as well as
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 the new apartments in the south-west of the
map
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 are developed so the
village
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 has more residential buildings
in
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at
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 present.
To sum up
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, the
village
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 of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
 shows significant changes between 1995 and
present
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the present
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. The
numbers
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number
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 of houses and recreational facilities has increased.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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