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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams given demonstrate the changes at Queen Mary Hospital from 1960 to 2000 .
To begin
 , in 1960 under the main
road
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road,
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 there was a shopping
centre
 in the northwest .
Secondly
 , Queen
mary
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Mary
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 had a wonderful farmland in the
southleft
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southwest
south left
 in 1960 .
Furthermore
, beside the farmland was the car park of the hospital .
In addition
 , in 1960 the hospital was in the northeast .
Also
 , in 1980 they
had
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opend
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opened
cancer
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a cancer
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centre
in
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on
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 the left side of the hospital .
Moreover
 , they had built a new pharmacy inside the hospital in 1980 .
Additionally
 , below the
cancer
centre
 was the nursing school .
Finally
 , the car park was in the southeast of the hospital map .
Besides
 , in 2000 the hospital had
same
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the same
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 meters
of
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as
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 the
cancer
centre
 approximately .
Although
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However
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, both
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the
a
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car park and nursing school were below the hospital and opposite the
cancer
centre
.
To conclude
 , Queen Mary Hospital
one
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is one
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 of the best hospitals
around
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in
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 the world and it
had
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has
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 really improved from 1960 to 2000 .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, cancer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial facilities
  • replacement
  • significant extension
  • absorbed
  • developments
  • introduction
  • adjacent
  • evolution
  • enhancing healthcare services
  • commercial spaces
  • medical facilities
  • expansion
  • modern healthcare needs
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