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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened and that you want your money back. Things to include: – Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. – Polite. No one responds to insults. – Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? – Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

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Dear Mr. Adam, My name is Nadezhda Eliseva. I’m writing
this
 letter to complain about my experience in your restaurant. Yesterday My husband and I had dinner at your restaurant. We celebrated our wedding anniversary, but our evening was ruined. Our
waiter
 was Mark Simens. We ordered grilled fish with vegetables, a beef steak, and a bottle of French white wine - Sauvignon
blanc
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. We were waiting for our order for more than an hour and the
waiter
 didn’t even bring us wine during that time. When the
waiter
 brought our order , there were
two
steaks
instead
 of one on one plate. We asked why there were
two
steaks
, and the
waiter
 answered that it was a normal potion. But when he brought our bill, it included
two
steaks
. And Mark told us that we had ordered
two
steaks
. But it is false. Mark refused to delete one dish from the bill. I’m really disappointed with your service and want my money back.
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coherence cohesion
Try to include a brief, clear introduction explaining the purpose of your letter and a concise conclusion wrapping up your request. This will enhance the logical structure and ensure the letter feels complete.
task achievement
Expand on how the disruption affected your anniversary experience to provide a more thorough and empathetic account.
task achievement
You provided specific details like the names of the waiter, the dishes ordered, and the incorrect billing, which makes your complaint clear and credible.
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You maintained a polite tone throughout the letter, which is crucial in maintaining professionalism and increasing the likelihood of a positive response.
coherence cohesion
The main points are presented clearly and supported with relevant details, making your argument compelling and easy to follow.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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