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The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary insititutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary insititutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.
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The chart depicts data on the proportion of boy and girl
pupils
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 who participated in various subjects, observed by tertiary institutions in
Austalia
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Australia
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1995
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in 1995
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.
Overall
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, there was a trend where the most
favored
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favoured
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subject
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 that girl
pupils
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participate
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participated
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was
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in was
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 Arts and
Humanities
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,
while
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 Engineering marked
as
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apply
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the highest rate of boy
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pupils
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pupils'
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 participation.
According to
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 the data, boys had several subjects they were interested
and
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in and
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 least interested
.
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in.
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 There was engineering as the main
subject
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 that boys
prefferred
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preferred
 at almost 20%, followed by math & science at almost 15%,
while
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 art &
humanities
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 and accounting & economics
were remain
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remained
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 the same at around 13%.
Furthermore
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, the students liked computing
studies
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 at 10%, surpassed business
studies
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, education, and health
studies
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in
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by
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 nearly 7%, 6%,
4
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and 4
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% respectively.
On the other hand
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, there were different
trend
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trends
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 in girl
pupils
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, where Arts &
Humanities
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 had the highest number of girls who loved
this
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subject
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 at 19%.
In contrast
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with
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apply
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health at 15% and accounting & economics
different
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is different
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1
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by 1
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% than that of health.
Additionally
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, the other subjects were below 10%, where business
studies
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, math and science, computing,
engineering
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and engineering
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 in order to 9%, 7%, 4%,
2
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and 2
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%, outraced by education at 10%.
To conclude
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, art &
humanities
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 was the most
favored
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favoured
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subject
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 for girls and reached
at
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apply
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19%,
while
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 Engineering was the most likely
subject
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 by the boys at 19%,
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however
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however,
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this
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subject
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also
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 marked as the most
dislike
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disliked
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subject
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 by the girls.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pupils, subject, humanities, studies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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