The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary insititutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.
The chart depicts data on the proportion of boy and girl
pupils
who participated in various subjects, observed by tertiary institutions in Austalia
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Australia
1995
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in 1995
Overall
, there was a trend where the most favored
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favoured
subject
that girl pupils
participate
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Arts and Change preposition
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Humanities
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Engineering marked as
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According to
the data, boys had several subjects they were interested and
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that boys prefferred
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preferred
while
art & humanities
and accounting & economics were remain
the same at around 13%. Change the verb form
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Furthermore
, the students liked computing studies
at 10%, surpassed business studies
, education, and health studies
in
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by
4
% respectively.
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On the other hand
, there were different trend
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trends
pupils
, where Arts & Humanities
had the highest number of girls who loved this
subject
at 19%. In contrast
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% than that of health. Change preposition
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Additionally
, the other subjects were below 10%, where business studies
, math and science, computing, engineering
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and engineering
2
%, outraced by education at 10%.
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To conclude
, art & humanities
was the most favored
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favoured
subject
for girls and reached at
19%, Change preposition
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while
Engineering was the most likely subject
by the boys at 19%, however
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this
subject
also
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