Two thing that ruin someone’s impression in your mind

In
the
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human history, from the ancient,
human kind
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humankind
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made cities and social systems because
human
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naturally
is
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social. In
this
age,
people
focus on their
impression
on
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others
. Many
things
improve the
impression
on
others
and many
things
are the opposite side, ruin the
impression
. Today, in
this
lecture I want to mention two
things
that ruin someone’s
impression
in my mind which are Insulting and cheating. If you asked
people
they said cheating is their red flag but in my mind and
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it has a different meaning. so,
first
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let’s redefine
the
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cheating. Cheating in my world is
that
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you do something which is harmful to my
trust
. It can be anything, it can be having sex with
somebody
or eating my pizza which I stored
last
night for my today lunch, despite you know I don’t have any lunch now. all these are cheating in my opinion.
Trust
is the most valuable thing in my relationship with
others
. When I
trust
somebody
is
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that means you respect me and you know what makes me sad so if you love me or you are my
friend
, you shouldn’t make me sad. But these days many
people
for their own benefit, harm their
friend
's
trust
. They hit their
friend
relationship with
others
for emotional or financial benefit. For the second one insulting
such
as bad words, cursing is one of the
things
that ruin someone’s
impression
. I agree
with
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that if you are close to
somebody
for a joke or
for showing
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you are close to your
friend
you can use these kinds of words but what is important for me is
that
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using insult to your
friend
in front of a stranger.
That is
humiliating but some dumbass thinks it’s cool and shows they are so friendly but everything is despite
of
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what are you thinking. If you are
friend
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with
somebody
you show your friendship by
respect
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your
friend
in front of strangers not insulting. Another thing which bothers me is insulting
people
for something which is not very important.
For example
, we see
people
insulting each other for very simple
things
such
a
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horning in
street
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or another thing. Anybody has his reasons for why that thing is ruining someone’s
impression
in his mind. For me, insulting and lying have a significant impact on other impressions for the reasons
which
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I mentioned earlier so if you want to be my
friend
obey
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