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What was the major decision the you have faced in your life?

#decision #life
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When I had completed my higher studies.There was a time when I was
confusing
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 which field to pursue.
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 was the major
decison
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decision
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 of my life. I
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discussed
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 concern with my professors and some of
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the industry
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 owners.
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, All of them suggested
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different fields but one of
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the close
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close
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professor
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He
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told me that I was very good at mathematics so,
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so pursing
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pursing
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 computer science
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 be
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 good fit for me.
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Also
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 he told me that
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the upcoming
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 era is
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 Computer science and
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Artificial
 Intelligence era. I consider computer
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science
, and now I am a Software Engineer and working for a remote job.So
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decison
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decision
 has changed my life and
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my
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 the path
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 success. In conclusion, I must say that the decision is the thing which changes your destiny.
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task achievement
You should elaborate a bit more on specific examples related to the decision-making process and outcomes.
coherence cohesion
Try to refine your logical structure, ensuring each paragraph clearly supports the main theme.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in understanding the main idea.
clarity
You provided some relevant points and your main idea is clear and comprehensive.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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