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The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart indicates how many international scholars studied
at
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in
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 the United Kingdom
university
 over a three-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest number of
students
 were local
men
 in British
university
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universities
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.
However
,women international
students
 did not tend to study majors in the UK
university
. In 2012,precisely 45 female
students
 studied majors at the United Kingdom
university
 (Which was the highest number of learners over the period),just ahead of the percentage of
students
 who were British women with just under 45 in 2011.
Moreover
,studying lessons at
the
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a
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 UK
university
 by local
men
students
 was slightly more popular than international
men
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male
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students
 with approximately 43 and 39 in 2012,
repectively
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respectively
.
In contrast
,foreign women learners did not prefer to finish their
study
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studies
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 at
the
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a
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 UK
university
 roughly 14 in 2010.(Which was the least number of
studnets
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students
 over the whole year).
In addition
,going to
university
 in England by
men
 who were British home
students
was
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were
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 a bit the same as international
men
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male
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 scholars with nearly 24 and 23 in 2011,respectively.
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