Museum and art galleries should concentrate on local works rather than show the cultures or artworks or other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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from the past of the country. There has been an argument that

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they are few local

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their clothing, their style, and the war equipment to show their

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become globally famous and tourist

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