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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates information about the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in the top ten countries during 2014.
Overall
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, China was the highest trend in 2004 with about 5.300 billion kWh in
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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.
According to
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 what was shown in the graph, the United States was the second trend after China in
electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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. What is more, the amount of
production
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electricity
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 in Russia was the same level as the amount of
electricity
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consumption
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 by 1 billion kWh.
In addition
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 to that, the number of
electricity
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production
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 increased slightly than the
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in four countries: Japan, India, Canada and France around 1 billion kWh.
Moreover
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, the
electricity
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consumption
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 of Germany went up more than
electricity
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production
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • measured in gigawatt-hours (GWh)
  • top ten countries
  • discrepancy
  • consumption levels
  • production levels
  • leading producers
  • leading consumers
  • notable differences
  • account for
  • rank
  • close behind
  • marginally higher
  • significant gap
  • roughly equal
  • substantially more
  • significantly less
  • outstrip
  • conversely
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