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The plans show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

#plans #show #layout #university #sports #centre #redevelopment
The pictures
illiturate
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illiterate
illustrate
university
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the university
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sport
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sports
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 centre
in
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now and how it will look after rebuiltment. There is
small
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a small
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 legend in the pictures
show
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showing
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 directions.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
sports
 centre construction has been improved. Nowadays,
sports
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the sports
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 centre has
25
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a 25
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 metres pool, changing room and seating and these objects will
be remained
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remain
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 in the future except
gym
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the gym
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 area,
it
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which
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 will be expanded.
In
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At
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 present,
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 center has outdoor courts its
west
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the west
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 and east.
Main
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The main
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 change is starting
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in these
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these area
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this area
these areas
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. Outdoor courts at the west side will be changed to
leisure
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a leisure
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 pool and it is next to the changing room. In spite of
this
, outdoor courts
at
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on
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 the east side will be turned into to
sports
 hall. Next to the
sports
 hall
it
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apply
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will be
built
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apply
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some new buildings,
two
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and two
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 dance
studio
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studios
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. Under the reception, some new buildings will be added
the
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to the
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 site. Two changing
room
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rooms
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 will be built at south-east and west-east in
corner
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the corner
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.
In addition
, there will be
added
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an added
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 cafe at
east
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the east
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 of the reception and
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a
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will be built
sports
 shop at
west
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the west
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 side of the reception.
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introduction conclusion present
The overall structure of your essay is good, but consider adding an introduction that clearly states what the diagrams are showing. This will help readers understand the context better.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay lacks a proper conclusion. A brief summary to wrap up your key points would enhance your essay's coherence.
logical structure
Use linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will make your essay more cohesive and easier to follow.
clear comprehensive ideas
Try to clarify and expand on your descriptions. For instance, specify what exact improvements or changes will be made to each area to provide a clearer picture.
relevant specific examples
Ensure that you are giving enough specific examples and details to support your descriptions. Mentioning more about the improvements and their benefits can help clarify your points.
complete response
You have covered most of the key changes in the university sports centre which shows a good understanding of the task.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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