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The graph beow shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph beow shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below displays the
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
 who travelled
in
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to
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 a particular Caribbean
island
during
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from
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 2010 to 2017.
It is clear that
 the total number of
tourists
 visiting the Caribbean
island
 rose rapidly and stably, especially the part of
tourists
whom
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who
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staying
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stay
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 on
cruise
ships
. What’s more, the number of
tourists
 staying on
cruise
ships
have
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has
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 the largest change in
7-years
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7-year
 periods. From the graph, it’s evident that the
amount
 of
tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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account
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accounted
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 for the largest proportion in 2010,which is three times the
amount
 of
tourists
 staying on
cruise
ships
, at about 0.75
millions
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million
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 and 0.25
millions
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million
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 respectively.
Therefore
, there are nearly 1
millions
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million
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visitors
 in
totally
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total
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.
Then
 in 2017, the total number of
visitors
 increased remarkably, at approximately 3.5
millions
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million
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. In
particularly
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particular
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, the
amount
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 increased dramatically, reaching
at
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apply
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2
millions
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million
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, more than the
visitors
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number of visitors
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whom
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who
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staying
Wrong verb form
stayed
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 on
island
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the island
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, which at only 1.5
millions
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million
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.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, visitors, island, tourists, cruise, ships, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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