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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The given column graph depicts the expense of in two nations on
cosumer
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consumer
 products in the year 2010. Inclusively, the figure for
France
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 underwent a dip, there was
a
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 increase in the expenditure
of
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on
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 consumer goods in the
UK
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.
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 with,the fraction of cars started the period to 400, 000 in
the
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France
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,
this
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 figure
higher
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 than
France
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 by 50,000.The expenditure
of
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on
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 consumer goods on books in
France
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 to 300,000  in the
UK
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 expenditure on books
meaningfully
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 higher than the French
of
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100,000.In the
UK
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,
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the expense
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expense
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on
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 cameras
just
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 over 350,000 was over double that of
France
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 which was only 150,000.
On the other hand
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, There was a drop in the
expenditures
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 on computers and
parfume
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perfume
 in the
UK
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 at over 350,000 and to roughly 140,000 respectively. In
the
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France
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France,
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 these costs
slightly
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are slightly
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 higher than
the
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in the
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UK
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to
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approximately 370,000 and
at
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200,000 respectively
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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