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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned furure development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned furure development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustrated map diagram demonstrate the changes made for
future
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 developmental plans in an industrial
area
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 of Norbiton.
Overall
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, to accommodate town people multiple facilities has been added in the
future
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 development plans . Upon closer examination, the current plans show two roads : one connects the industrial
area
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's roundabout to the town in west via a connecting
road
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, and another
road
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 joins housing
properties
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 to the roundabout. The parallel
road
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 demonstrates 8 housing
properties
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 in total: Five
properties
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 on the parallel
road
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while
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 the other three surrounds the roundabout.
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, a farmland separating it with the industrial
area
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 in the far north In the
future
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, facilities
such
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 as medical centre, playground, shops and school will be added in the industrial
area
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.
First,
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housing that surrounds the roundabout will be replaced with medical centre and shops opposite to each other in between connecting
road
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 and roundabout.
Second,
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the replaced housing
properties
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 will connect the roundabout via 2 separate roads: two houses on the northwest's
road
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, and one on northern
road
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 connecting the roundabout to residential property & farmland using a bridge. Meanwhile, the five houses present on the parallel
road
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 will be replaced with 2 small and one big housing
properties
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along with
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 playground in between the houses and school on the end of
road
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 will be added in
future
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words future, area, road, properties with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • existing features
  • industrial area
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • office buildings
  • proposed changes
  • new developments
  • green spaces
  • infrastructure improvements
  • compare
  • current industrial area
  • planned development
  • land use
  • aesthetics
  • functionality
  • potential benefits
  • drawbacks
  • local community
  • job creation
  • environmental impact
  • quality of life
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