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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table show the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table show the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar charts illustrate the information about the selling achimenes of 5 various categories
such
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 as petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
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 and textiles between 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, there is a mild increase in three industrial classifications but in germs and jewellery
as well as
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 in agricultural
products
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 the export trend is stable. Petroleum
products
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 and engineered goods are important required
products
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 among 5 categories so in 2015 the export value for both
products
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 was just under 60
billion
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dollars
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. Between 2015 and 2016 the growth rate in sales for petroleum
products
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 is 3% and for engineered materials is 8.5 %. The same trend was
also
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 observed in the market overseas of textiles as in 2015 it was just under 30
billion
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dollars
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 and in 2016 there was a significant peak of nearly 15.24% reaching over 30
billion
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dollars
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.
Although
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 in the three categories, there is a significant effort for growth in the category of gems and jewellery production there is a gradual decline between 2015 and 2016
nearly
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of nearly
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 5.18%. The same tendency was
also
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 indicated in agricultural
products
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 as it remains steady at just over 30
billion
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dollars
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. (S.N)

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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