The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information bt selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

Summarize the information bt selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of the population
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located in Asia namely, the Philippines,Malaysia,
Thailand
and
Indonesia
.It is divided into two periods, The first
years
from 1970 to 2020 and the
last
one from 2030 to 2040.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that
Indonesia
accomplished the highest rate of nations throughout periods.
However
, it is obvious that the lowest percentage was in
Thailand
. Turning to the first point,
Indonesia
and
Thailand
went up by just 10 per cent during four
years
from 1970 to 2000 . Unfortunately, in the following two
years
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Thailand
remained stable at almost 25% ,
however
;
Indonesia
continued to rise from 20% to reach a bit below 60%.
In addition
, through one year, the Philippines' population had not changed and
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30 per cent and after a year a rise was observed, increasing back to 50%. Unfortunately, it was dropping back to 40% in 1990 to 2010.
Consequently
, the Philippines returned to rise just over 50%.
lastly
, we can see an increase in population in Malaysia over three
years
from 30% to 40%. From 1990 to 2040, Malaysia continued to go up approximately double degrees to 80%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words thailand, indonesia, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.

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  • urbanization
  • population density
  • trend
  • percentage
  • urban population
  • actual data
  • predictions
  • steady increase
  • striking difference
  • projection
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  • contributing factors
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