The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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weapon
was in Japan by United
States where it killed many Correct article usage
the United
of
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apply
people
. In
the same time that incident mark Change preposition
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defeat
of Japan in Add an article
the defeat
world war
two. All over the worldCorrect your spelling
World War
see how
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,
weapon
can be very dangerous to everyone and Fix the agreement mistake
weapons
developed
the number of Verb problem
apply
that
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apply
weapon
must be limited. Fix the agreement mistake
weapons
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the other Change preposition
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side
nuclear has Add a comma
side,
a
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an
advantages
which can Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
became
clean and cheaper Change the verb form
become
energy
. In
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this
essay will describe how nuclear dangerous and has a advantages
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advantages
an advantage
to
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for
human
.
Some Fix the agreement mistake
humans
country
have a permit to develop nuclear Fix the agreement mistake
countries
weapon
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weapons
as
protect their Change preposition
to
country
, even it
is dangerous to Correct word choice
if it
other
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another country
other countries
country
especially
to Add the comma(s)
, especially
human
and nature. Nuclear Fix the agreement mistake
humans
weapon
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weapons
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were
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States to defeat Japan many Correct article usage
the United
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people
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died
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of Correct quantifier usage
much
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
broken
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was broken
moreover
the radiation is very dangerous to human
body. It has happened in Ukraine where a lot of Add an article
the human
people
got the radiation and have serious desease
about it.
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diseases
However
nuclear can be a cheaper and saver
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safer
energy
than use
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apply
the
fossil Correct article usage
apply
energy
which is the majority people
use Change preposition
of people
such
as coal which is non-renewable. Nuclear can be solution
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a solution
the solution
which
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apply
build
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nuclear
power plant can be economical because that Correct article usage
a nuclear
energy
can be used many times but it still need
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needs
consider
and carefull to calculated the impact Wrong verb form
considered
to build
it, because Change preposition
of building
damaged
by leakaged will Replace the word
damage
very
dangerous to human health.
The Add a missing verb
be very
conclution
is Correct your spelling
conclusion
make
a nuclear Wrong verb form
that making
weapon
is useless and just make
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makes
the
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apply
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other
country
in affraid
of tension in Correct your spelling
afraid
this
world but the other side nuclear can be usefull
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useful
to
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for
energy
such
as providing electricity to citizen
more economically but still Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
need
more Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
carefull
to build it with calculating places or effect to society.Correct your spelling
careful
carefully
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