The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart reveals the changes in employees and
factories
for silk production in England and Wales. The period covered is between 1851 and 1901. The
number
of workers decreased considerably throughout the five decades. The total figure was 130,025 including both male employees at 55,338 and females at 74,687 in 1851.
However
, it experienced a steady dropping ranging from 10,000 to 30,000
people
every decade.
As a result
, no more than 50,000
people
worked in 1901.
In contrast
,
factories
for silk production showed a rise in their
number
. Starting at 272 in 1851, the
number
of
factories
soared to 768 by 1861. After that came a fluctuation
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700 by 1881, finishing at 625 in 1901, of which around 20,000
people
were men, and nearly 28,000
people
were women. In summary,
while
the
number
of employees declined significantly, that of
factories
more than doubled during the period.
Consequently
, the
number
of workers per factory plunged.
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