1.- It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A certain group of
population
agrees on Add an article
the population
disappearing
public Verb problem
removing
transportation
and cars
from the city
centers
with the idea of allowing only bikes. Change the spelling
centres
This
essay completely disagrees with this
statement since most of the people
who live in the city
center depend on cars
and public transportation
to move to different places being their main or unique way of transport and not all of the citizens possess the knowledge of how to ride a bike or are able to learn.
One of the main reasons why this
essay totally disagrees with disappearing public transportation
and vehicles such
as cars
is because these are the primary and sometimes only
mode of Add an article
the only
transportation
of most of the population
in different city
centers
. Change the spelling
centres
Everyday
Correct word choice
People
people
from
different ages (school kids, working adults, seniors, among others) need to travel to short or Change preposition
of
long distance
places. Add a hyphen
long-distance
This
happens thanks to the
public Correct article usage
apply
transportation
or own vehicles that allow citizens to get to their destiny safely and on time. For example
, I currently live in the suburb of Neutral Bay and need to travel everyday
to Bondi where the childcare centre where I work resides. Replace the word
every day
Therefore
, in the mornings I take a bus which brings me to my working place in only 30 minutes.
Another reason why I disagree with the previous idea is that although
many people
would love to ride a bike, unfortunately
they do not have the skills to do it. Plenty of Add the comma(s)
unfortunately,
this
population
did not get proper instruction on how to ride a bike during their childhood or adolescence making it even more difficult to learn the skills at an advanced age or being in possession of enough time to do it. For example
, most senior (not most of
) citizens, who merely depend on public transport or vehicles to move to different places, would find it pretty difficult and even unsafe Change preposition
apply
in becoming
competent enough to transport themselves Change preposition
to become
in
bicycles.
In conclusion, Change preposition
on
although
banning cars
and public transportation
from city
centres have
been advised, I totally disagree with Correct subject-verb agreement
has
this
idea since it is the primary way of transportation
for most (not of
most) of the Change preposition
apply
population
and not all people
possess the skills or have the opportunity to become proficient enough to only ride bikes.Submitted by nila.hiperu on
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