The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2015.  Units are given in percentages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2015.  Units are given in percentages.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts workers of different ages in five countries between 1960 and 2015. As can be seen,  there are many fluctuations from year to year, we can identify some upward and downward trends. During the period all figures tried to be highest. In 1960, the Deutschland began the timeframe higher than others at approximately 67 before showing a noticeable decline to nearly 62. After two decades it peaked at about 69 and displayed a gradual fall until the final stage. Japan demonstrated the same pattern but did not
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curved change at the beginning, and finished lower than Germany. As for the USA, it started at a lower level compared to other nations,
although
it showed a significant increase over the three decades and overtook two figures,
then
from 1980 to 2000 displayed an almost imperceptible fluctuation,
then
presented a gradual decrease like other figures, but in 2040 and 2050 it
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unchanged.
In addition
, it completed the interval high relative to others. As for France,
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figure experienced similar changes to the USA but less variation compared to the other countries throughout
this
phase.
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