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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares the most advanced 10 countries
both
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in both
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 electric
consumpted
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consumption
 and generated in the year 2014.
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, In 2014,
China
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 and the USA, by far, were the leading 2 countries in terms of producing and consuming electric power, and they were able to provide
power
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the power
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 needed. Only
germany
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Germany
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,
however
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, had to import it. In comparison to
other
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the other
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 8 countries,
China
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 and the United States were the most significant producer and consumer domains.
With
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 producing almost 5.4
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billions
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billion
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kWh
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 and
by
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apply
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using nearly 5.3
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billions
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billion
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kWh
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,
China
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 had the most significant amount of
electric
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electricity
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 in and out. The United States followed
China
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,
total
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in total
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 production and consumption by just under 4.1
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billions
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billion
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kWh
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 and around 3.9
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billions
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billion
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kWh
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. With the
exceptions
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exception
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 of
China
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 and the USA, Russia was the merely country that could both generate and consume
electric
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electricity
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 over 1 billion
kWh
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. Each figure was so close to
each
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the
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 other, which was slightly over 1 billion
kWh
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. Russia was followed by Japan, India, Canada, France,
Brasil
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Brazil
, Germany and
Korea
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Korean
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 Republic, respectively.
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, Germany was the only country
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where that
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that
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the
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 figure
of
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for
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electric
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electricity
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 produced was less than
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the electric
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electric
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electricity
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 consumed and they were around 0.55
kWh
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, billions, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • measured in gigawatt-hours (GWh)
  • top ten countries
  • discrepancy
  • consumption levels
  • production levels
  • leading producers
  • leading consumers
  • notable differences
  • account for
  • rank
  • close behind
  • marginally higher
  • significant gap
  • roughly equal
  • substantially more
  • significantly less
  • outstrip
  • conversely
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