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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie chart illustrate information about crime in the United Kingdom for the
last
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 year.
overall
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, the line graph shows that most of the
crimes
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 were by
people
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 aged between 16 to 20.
on the other hand
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, the chart
presents
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shows
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 that the greatest percentage was for violent crime. Individuals start making
crimes
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 when they are between 8 and 12 around 5
thousand
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.
then
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 the number of
crimes
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 had a significant increase to the
people
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 aged between 12 and 16 to 70
thousand
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.
people
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 aged between 16 and 20 had 80
thousand
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crimes
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.
On the other hand
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, youth aged 20 to 24 had only 60
thousand
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crimes
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.
People
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 aged from 28 to 40 had a little under 20
thousand
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.
However
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,
people
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 from age 44 to 60 were around ten
thousand
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crimes
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. Violent
crimes
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 in the UK had the highest percentage 46 per cent. but property comes and drug
crimes
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 were just over a fifth.
In addition
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, public order
crimes
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 were a little under ten per cent.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, people, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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