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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie chart illustrate information about crime in the United Kingdom for the
last
 year.
overall
, the line graph shows that most of the
crimes
 were by
people
 aged between 16 to 20.
on the other hand
, the chart
presents
Verb problem
shows
show examples
 that the greatest percentage was for violent crime. Individuals start making
crimes
 when they are between 8 and 12 around 5
thousand
.
then
 the number of
crimes
 had a significant increase to the
people
 aged between 12 and 16 to 70
thousand
.
people
 aged between 16 and 20 had 80
thousand
crimes
.
On the other hand
, youth aged 20 to 24 had only 60
thousand
crimes
.
People
 aged from 28 to 40 had a little under 20
thousand
.
However
,
people
 from age 44 to 60 were around ten
thousand
crimes
. Violent
crimes
 in the UK had the highest percentage 46 per cent. but property comes and drug
crimes
 were just over a fifth.
In addition
, public order
crimes
 were a little under ten per cent.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, people, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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