The given two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities with European adults in 1985 and 1995.
The pie charts below compare the proportion of different leisure
activities
engaged in by mature people in Europe between 1985 and 1995.
Overall
, it is noticeable that watching TV was the primary activity in both years among adults
. Moreover
, we can see that mature individuals in 1985 enjoyed with less more activities
than in 1995.
To begin
with, in 1985, European adults
loved watching TV medias
more than other actions spending 32% of Fix the agreement mistake
media
time
. The second place was the eating out with the result of 23%, Add an article
the time
whereas
people spent just 21 % of their time
by
talking with their friends. Change preposition
apply
Additionally
the survey results illustrated that European Add a comma
Additionally,
adults
enjoyed talking with family such
as when dinner time
and so on which consists just 18% of time
, and the other 6 per cent were other things the Add an article
the time
adults
were doing.
In 1995, there were a
much more leisure Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
activities
which old people loved to do. Likewise
, watching TV required 30% of time
, which means that it was Add an article
the time
also
one of the major actions that adults
liked. Talking with friends and family also
existed at that moment consisting of respectively 26% and 7% of whole
Add an article
the whole
time
. The newer activity was playing computer games with 27% which is rare among adults
. In addition
, the penultimate activity was eating, on which adults
spent only 8 per cent of their time
, significantly lower than before, with older adults
spending only 2 per cent on other activities
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