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the maps below show the center of a small town called islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

the maps below show the center of a small town called islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The provided maps show the current situation of Islip town
center
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centre
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 and the future plan for
developing
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development
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. It is
eviedent
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evident
 that, there will have been
considrable
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considerable
 changes in
this
 area,
the
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center
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 of Islip will keep its small size
druing
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during
 the breakthroughs.
In addition
, there will be some significant changes in
road
 networks around the town
center
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centre
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,
shops
, and
park
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parks
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. Notably, the future plan will have consistent new facilities
such
 as new housing and
car
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a car
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park
. At the moment,
shops
 are located on
the
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either side of Main
road
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Road
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on
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 the
northren
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northern
 part of the downtown. Behind
shops
, there is a
country side
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countryside
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. For reaching the far south, the Main
road
 has a
connection
 from
west
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the west
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 which
is ended
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 up with housing.
Moreover
, the western
connection
 from Main
road
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Road
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 has a link reaching to school. Another
connection
 of Mainroad is on the east ending with
park
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the park
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 which has a path connected to
main
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the main
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road
. It is planned to extend roads by building
two way
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 roads all around the
center
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centre
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 of the town.
Main
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road
 will be replaced by
area
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an area
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 only for
pedesterians
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pedestrians
.
Besides
, all the
shops
locating
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located
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 at the north of Main
road
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Road
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 will be altered by bus
station
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stations
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 on the west and
new
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newly
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 built housing on the east with a
connection
 to the
road
 networks. A car
park
 and
shoping
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shopping
center
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centre
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 will be located between
bus
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the bus
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 station and
new
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the new
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 housing.
Additionally
, the number of housing will be doubled to 4,
while
park
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the park
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 will have become smaller, the school will
expanded
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expand
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 a little.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, road, shops, park, connection with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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