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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the Information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the Information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant
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This
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 picture below represents two different
road
 structures surrounding
same
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the same
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 hospital in 2007 and 2010. By comparing
two
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the two
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 maps I will
analize
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analyse
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the difference
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difference
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differences
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 between them and summarize
given
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the given
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 information. The most noticeable change is
separation
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the separation
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 of public car parking from staff car parking on south east into
east
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the east
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 side of
hospital
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the hospital
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.
This
 decision upgraded facilities, providing higher capacity in parking places, and comfortable conditions for both workers and clients.
Second
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The second
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 change is
replacement
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the replacement
a replacement
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 of multiple bus stops
on
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in
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south
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the south
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by
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with
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bigger
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a bigger
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 bus station
at
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in
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south west
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south-west
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. Removing all of
bus
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the bus
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 stops around
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the hospital
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hospital
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Hospital Road
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road
 allowed to
install
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installation
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two
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of two
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 roundabouts: one between
city
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the city
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road
 and
hospital
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the hospital
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road
, second one between
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the hospital
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hospital
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Hospital
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road
 and
ring
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the ring
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road
 After concluding
main
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the main
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 changes
of
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in
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road
 access to a city hospital, it appears that
2010
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the 2010
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 version became much more convenient than
2007
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the 2007
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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