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The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates how British
children
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 aged 11 to 16 years went to
school
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 based on different categories of distances (0-1, 1-2, 2-5, and over 5
miles
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) in a year. Units are expressed by percentage.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the graph that walking and bicycling were used when the
distance
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 was between 0-2
miles
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.
However
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,
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Bus
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the Bus
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 was a popular way to go to
school
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 when the
distance
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 was over 5
miles
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.
Similarly
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, no
children
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 went to
school
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 on foot or cycling when the
distance
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 was more than 5
miles
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. Walking was chosen by most of the students (90%) to journey to
school
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 when the
distance
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 was 0-1 mile.
On the other hand
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, a small number of students (less than 10%) took a
bus
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 or car to reach their destination for 0-1
miles
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 of
distance
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. In terms of 1-2
miles
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 of
distance
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,
children
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 liked cycling (more than 75%) as compared with walking (60%). Regarding, 2-5
miles
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 of
distance
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, half of the students preferred to
bus
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 which was very close to bicycling (around 49%).
Furthermore
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, when it was more than 5
miles
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, almost 70% of
children
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 reached
to
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school
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 by
bus
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whereas
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 car was used by slightly above 20%. Interestingly, no
children
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 chose bicycle and walking when it was more than 5 km away from
school
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, school, miles, distance, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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