The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

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The line chart displays the profits year on year of

Amandine

Bakery

, Mary Bakeshop and, Bolo Cakery between 2000 and 2010.

Overall

, Mary Bakeshop started the period with the highest earnings and finished with the lowest.

Amandine

Bakery

and Bolo Cakery started with lower earnings but,

end

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up with higher

gains

been

Amandine

Bakery

the

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bakery

with the most

gains

. Mary

Backeshop

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Bakeshop

was the most popular

bakery

in 2000 and 2002 with earnings hovering just below $10000, since 2004 its

gains

dramatically dropped reaching the lowest

incomes

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$4000. Bolo Cakery, started the period with the lowest incomes, since 2002 their

gains

went up just over $4000 and kept remained until 2007 when the incomes started to go up reaching nearly $6000 in 2010.

Amandine

Bakery

started just below $6000 in 2000 and

remains

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until 2005 when the

gains

abruptly

growth

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reaching just over $10000 throughout the years.

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