The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

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The line chart displays the profits year on year of

Amandine

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Bakery

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, Mary Bakeshop and, Bolo Cakery between 2000 and 2010.

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, Mary Bakeshop started the period with the highest earnings and finished with the lowest.

Amandine

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Bakery

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and Bolo Cakery started with lower earnings but,

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up with higher

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been

Amandine

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Bakery

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the

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bakery

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with the most

gains

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. Mary

Backeshop

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Bakeshop

was the most popular

bakery

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in 2000 and 2002 with earnings hovering just below $10000, since 2004 its

gains

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dramatically dropped reaching the lowest

incomes

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$4000. Bolo Cakery, started the period with the lowest incomes, since 2002 their

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went up just over $4000 and kept remained until 2007 when the incomes started to go up reaching nearly $6000 in 2010.

Amandine

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Bakery

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started just below $6000 in 2000 and

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until 2005 when the

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abruptly

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reaching just over $10000 throughout the years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amandine, bakery, gains with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

148 words

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