The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

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The line chart displays the profits year on year of

Amandine

Bakery

, Mary Bakeshop and, Bolo Cakery between 2000 and 2010.

Overall

, Mary Bakeshop started the period with the highest earnings and finished with the lowest.

Amandine

Bakery

and Bolo Cakery started with lower earnings but,

end

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ended

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up with higher

gains

been

Amandine

Bakery

the

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being the

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bakery

with the most

gains

. Mary

Backeshop

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Bakeshop

was the most popular

bakery

in 2000 and 2002 with earnings hovering just below $10000, since 2004 its

gains

dramatically dropped reaching the lowest

incomes

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income

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with

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$4000. Bolo Cakery, started the period with the lowest incomes, since 2002 their

gains

went up just over $4000 and kept remained until 2007 when the incomes started to go up reaching nearly $6000 in 2010.

Amandine

Bakery

started just below $6000 in 2000 and

remains

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remained

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until 2005 when the

gains

abruptly

growth

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grew

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reaching just over $10000 throughout the years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amandine, bakery, gains with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

148 words

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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

organized tours to remote communities and other countris are increasingly popular. is it a positive or negative development for local people and environment

The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those times than they are now. What problems will this cause? What can be done to solve these problems?

Speech freedom is important for free society . Do you agree ar disagree?

A serious problem affecting countries right across the globe is the lack of water for drinking, washing and other household uses. Why do many countries face water shortages, and what could be done to alleviate the problem?

Many customs and traditional ways of behavior are no longer relevant to modern life and not worth keeping. Do you agree or disagree?