The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.
The line chart displays the profits year on year of
Amandine
Bakery
, Mary Bakeshop and, Bolo Cakery between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, Mary Bakeshop started the period with the highest earnings and finished with the lowest.
Amandine
Bakery
and Bolo Cakery started with lower earnings but,
end
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up with higher
gains
been
Amandine
Bakery
the
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being the
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bakery
with the most
gains
. Mary
Backeshop
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Bakeshop
was the most popular
bakery
in 2000 and 2002 with earnings hovering just below $10000, since 2004 its
gains
dramatically dropped reaching the lowest
incomes
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income
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with
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at
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$4000. Bolo Cakery, started the period with the lowest incomes, since 2002 their
gains
went up just over $4000 and kept remained until 2007 when the incomes started to go up reaching nearly $6000 in 2010.
Amandine
Bakery
started just below $6000 in 2000 and
remains
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until 2005 when the
gains
abruptly
growth
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grew
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reaching just over $10000 throughout the years.
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