The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese Yen from 1953 to 1973.

The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese Yen from 1953 to 1973.
The line graph displays the mean monthly salary and how much it cost to buy a black and white and a coloured
TV
in Japanese currency between 1953 and 1973.
Overall
, the average monthly salary increased gradually during the recorded period.
While
the
prices
of coloured
TV
were higher than Black and white
TV
, both version
prices
decreased gradually during the time span. In Japan, the salary
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each month rose gradually from nearly 30
Yen
in 1953 to almost 120
Yen
in 1968, before it increased dramatically to just over 180
Yen
in 1973. The coloured
TV
trend started in 1958
,
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when the
prices
were significantly high. Coloured
TV
Value decreased significantly from nearly 180
Yen
in 1958 to just above 100
Yen
in 1963 before it dropped steadily for the next 10 years to just above 80
Yen
in 1973.
Although
Black and White
TV
prices
were less than Coloured ones, their
prices
went down gradually,
similarly
. Black and White
TV
prices
declined gradually from around 100
Yen
in 1953 to nearly 40
Yen
in 1968, before they remained steady for the next five years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, prices, yen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average monthly salary
  • Black and white TV
  • Colour TV
  • Japanese Yen
  • Affordability
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Technological advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Price dynamics
  • Market changes
  • Increase/decrease
  • Ratio
  • Introduction
  • Compare/contrast
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