You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job . Write a letter to your manager. In letter: • describe the training course you want to do • explain what the company could do help you • say how the course will be useful for job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the job opportunity posted on the company's website

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afternoon.

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, I would like to thank you for giving your employers

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opportunity, it will highly increase the skills and

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experience

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in the

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work . It was very useful in my job . In fact , it is about networking

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well_known

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well-known

professor teaches computer networking.

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is a 3 month long

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course that will

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on 13

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April and classes

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be held 3 times a week on weekdays in the evenings , from 4 pm to 7 pm .

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, I would like to request you to allow me to leave early

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twice

a week for the next 3 months to attend

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training course. So , I need time off to attend

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training course and it is

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necessary for the company to hire a computer expert to run a nationwide network of computers . Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Baxtinur Kholliyeva

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task achievement

The letter addresses the main points but lacks detailed explanation and examples. Try to elaborate on how the course specifically benefits your role and the company.

coherence cohesion

The letter has some logical flow but would benefit from clearer organization. Each point should be more clearly separated into its paragraph for better readability.

coherence cohesion

There are a few grammatical errors and inconsistent tense usage. Proofreading for grammar and clarity will significantly improve the readability and professionalism of the letter.

suitable writing tone

The letter has a polite and respectful tone which is appropriate for a letter to a manager.

greeting and closing

The closing and greeting of the letter are well-done and appropriate for the context.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

183 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

professional development
training course
skillset enhancement
educational leave
sponsorship
reimbursement
knowledge integration
work efficiency
career progression
continuing education
team contribution
productivity boost
expertise building
industry standards
hands-on experience
networking opportunities
cutting-edge techniques
best practices
return on investment
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