You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job . Write a letter to your manager. In letter: • describe the training course you want to do • explain what the company could do help you • say how the course will be useful for job

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the job opportunity posted on the company's website
this
afternoon.
Firstly
, I would like to thank you for giving your employers
this
opportunity, it will highly increase the skills and
experiencesof
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work . It was very useful in my job . In fact , it is about networking
offices system
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a
well_known
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well-known
professor teaches computer networking.
This
is a 3 month long
part- time
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course that will
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April and classes
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be held 3 times a week on weekdays in the evenings , from 4 pm to 7 pm .
Therefore
, I would like to request you to allow me to leave early
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twice
a week for the next 3 months to attend
this
training course. So , I need time off to attend
this
training course and it is
also
necessary for the company to hire a computer expert to run a nationwide network of computers . Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Baxtinur Kholliyeva
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task achievement
The letter addresses the main points but lacks detailed explanation and examples. Try to elaborate on how the course specifically benefits your role and the company.
coherence cohesion
The letter has some logical flow but would benefit from clearer organization. Each point should be more clearly separated into its paragraph for better readability.
coherence cohesion
There are a few grammatical errors and inconsistent tense usage. Proofreading for grammar and clarity will significantly improve the readability and professionalism of the letter.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite and respectful tone which is appropriate for a letter to a manager.
greeting and closing
The closing and greeting of the letter are well-done and appropriate for the context.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • training course
  • skillset enhancement
  • educational leave
  • sponsorship
  • reimbursement
  • knowledge integration
  • work efficiency
  • career progression
  • continuing education
  • team contribution
  • productivity boost
  • expertise building
  • industry standards
  • hands-on experience
  • networking opportunities
  • cutting-edge techniques
  • best practices
  • return on investment
  • in-house training
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