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Band 4.5

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum.** Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/ unpaid work.** In your letter, - explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum - describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful - give details of when you would be available for work Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#museum #home #people #work #director #skills #qualities #addresses #sir #madam
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Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. I have
listened
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 that our museum is looking for volunteers for all kinds of work. I grew up here , and the best memories of
the
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my
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 childhood have connected with
this
 place. All of my
vacation
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vacations
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 I spent in
museum
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the museum
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, it was the best place for me. I work now as a history teacher in our school, and I'll be useful for you to
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task achievement
Provide more details on why you want to do voluntary work and how you would be useful.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph supports a single idea for better flow and readability.
greeting and closing
The greeting is polite and appropriate for a letter of application.
suitable writing tone
Your writing tone is suitable for the context, maintaining a respectful and professional tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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