You and your family have Just come back from a holiday staying in a rented apartment overlooking the sea. The apartment was very unsatisfactory. Write a letter of complaint to the manager of the agency from which you rented the apartment. In your letter, - give details of the things that were unsatisfactory - explain the reactions of the members of your family - ask the manager what he/she is going to do about the situation
Dear Sir or
Modam
I am writing in order to complain about Correct your spelling
Madam
apartment
. My family Add an article
the apartment
are hating
that Wrong verb form
hates
apartment
. Because apartment
is very noisy and dirty. It has not got comfort.
I took Add an article
the apartment
apartment
for my family, Add an article
an apartment
however
it has Add a comma
however,
not
comfort. I ordered before I Correct your spelling
no
going
. The facilities written on the website are not available in real life. Wrong verb form
went
For
example
I saw air Add a comma
example,
condition
, free Internet and TV on Wrong verb form
conditioning
website
. I had booked a Correct article usage
the website
beach facing
Add a hyphen
beach-facing
apartment
but it was not facing the beach.
My family members were angry about this
situation. Again weather
was very Hot. My room and my parents were not air Correct article usage
the weather
condition
. My father shouted Wrong verb form
conditioned
me
. Because I booked Change preposition
to me
this
apartment
. My little sister was two years old. She cryed
. My older brother Correct your spelling
cried
insulded
me. My mother was short of breath because of the heat.
Depending on the situation, give us our money back or give us another Correct your spelling
insulted
included
apartment
. If we booked for ten days, give us another four or five days. You can pay us to fly home.
I look forward to hearing you!
Yours faithfully,
Zafar ShaynazarovSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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task achievement
The letter contains the main points required for the task but lacks detailed explanations and elaboration on why the apartment was unsatisfactory.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph deals with a single main idea. For example, separate the complaint about cleanliness and noise from the reactions of family members.
task achievement
Be more specific and clear about what actions you want the manager to take. Consider suggesting a more polite and professional tone in your requests.
task achievement
You've successfully included all required elements: mentioning the unsatisfactory conditions, explaining the reactions of family members, and asking for a solution.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing phrases are correctly used.