The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. (rewrite)

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. (rewrite)
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The diagram illustrates the process involved in producing carbonated drinks, starting from
water
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purification and ending with the distribution of the final products to retail outlets.
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, the production of carbonated beverages involves five distinct stages:
water
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purification, heating and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling, and
finally
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, packaging. The process is systematic and requires careful control at each stage to ensure product quality. The first stage involves purifying raw
water
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. The
water
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is passed through a filter to remove any impurities,
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softened, and treated with chemicals to eliminate undesirable odors. Once purified, the
water
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is pumped into electric heaters for the heating process. After being heated, the
water
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travels through a cooling pipe and enters the carbonation chamber, where it is infused with carbon dioxide to create carbonated
water
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. In the next stage, the carbonated
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is transferred to a mixing tank. Here,
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colour
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, syrup, and
flavor
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flavour
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are added
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the desired beverage recipe. The mixture is
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thoroughly blended to ensure uniformity.
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this
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, the drink is filtered to remove any residual solids and
then
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filled into bottles and cans, depending on packaging requirements.
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, the filled bottles and cans are packaged and transported by lorries to various supermarkets and retailers, ready for distribution to consumers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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