The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic games. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic games.

Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the amount of
medals
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took
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won
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by the best ten nations in the London 2012 Olympic
games
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Games
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the table that
USA
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the USA
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is in the first
place
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,
while
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Australia
in
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the
last
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despite of fact that their total
medals
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more
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are more
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than Hungary. In 2012, United States
sportsmens
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sportsmen
win
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won
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46
gold
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medals
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, 29 silver
medals
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and 29 bronze.
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, it is the maximum
number
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of
gold
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and silver
medals
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among
the
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all countries and the peak
number
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of bronze
medals
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took Russia with 32
medals
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in total 82 and
stay
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at fourth
place
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in the
Olymic
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Olympic
Olympics
. China and
UK
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the UK
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took second and third
place
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with
overall
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88 and 65
medals
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, respectively.
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, South Korea with 28
medals
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took
5st
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place
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.
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, Germany and France with
same
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a same
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number
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of
gold
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medals
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took 6th and 7th places, but Germany had 10
medals
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more than France, so it
is
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one step higher than him. Following that, Italy
get
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8st
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place
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with 28
medals
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. Despite of fact that Hungary took
lower
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a lower
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number
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of
medals
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with 17 in total, it took
more
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a more
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valuable
place
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than Australia with 35
medals
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and it
is gives
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shows
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us that
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number
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the number
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of
gold
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medals
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are
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very
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more
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important than
total
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a total
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of every
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medals
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medal
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, place, gold, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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