The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic games. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic games.

Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the amount of
medals
took
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won
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by the best ten nations in the London 2012 Olympic
games
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.
Overall
, it is clear from the table that
USA
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the USA
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is in the first
place
,
while
Australia
in
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the
last
despite of fact that their total
medals
more
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are more
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than Hungary. In 2012, United States
sportsmens
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sportsmen
win
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won
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46
gold
medals
, 29 silver
medals
and 29 bronze.
Additionally
, it is the maximum
number
of
gold
and silver
medals
among
the
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all countries and the peak
number
of bronze
medals
took Russia with 32
medals
in total 82 and
stay
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at fourth
place
in the
Olymic
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Olympic
Olympics
. China and
UK
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the UK
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took second and third
place
with
overall
88 and 65
medals
, respectively.
Moreover
, South Korea with 28
medals
took
5st
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5th
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place
.
Furthermore
, Germany and France with
same
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a same
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number
of
gold
medals
took 6th and 7th places, but Germany had 10
medals
more than France, so it
is
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was
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one step higher than him. Following that, Italy
get
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8st
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8th
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place
with 28
medals
. Despite of fact that Hungary took
lower
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a lower
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number
of
medals
with 17 in total, it took
more
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a more
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valuable
place
than Australia with 35
medals
and it
is gives
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shows
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us that
number
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the number
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of
gold
medals
are
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is
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very
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more
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important than
total
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a total
the total
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of every
medals
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medal
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.

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