The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic games. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the amount of

medals

took

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won

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by the best ten nations in the London 2012 Olympic

games

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Games

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Overall

, it is clear from the table that

USA

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the USA

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is in the first

place

while

Australia

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is in

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the

last

despite of fact that their total

medals

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are more

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than Hungary. In 2012, United States

sportsmens

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sportsmen

win

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gold

medals

, 29 silver

medals

and 29 bronze.

Additionally

, it is the maximum

number

gold

and silver

medals

among

the

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apply

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all countries and the peak

number

of bronze

medals

took Russia with 32

medals

in total 82 and

stay

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at fourth

place

in the

Olymic

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Olympic

Olympics

. China and

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the UK

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took second and third

place

with

overall

88 and 65

medals

, respectively.

Moreover

, South Korea with 28

medals

took

5st

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place

Furthermore

, Germany and France with

same

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a same

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number

gold

medals

took 6th and 7th places, but Germany had 10

medals

more than France, so it

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one step higher than him. Following that, Italy

get

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8st

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place

with 28

medals

. Despite of fact that Hungary took

lower

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number

medals

with 17 in total, it took

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a more

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valuable

place

than Australia with 35

medals

and it

is gives

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shows

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us that

number

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the number

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gold

medals

are

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very

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important than

total

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a total

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of every

medals

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medal

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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, place, gold, number with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

207 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic games. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

Older people often choose to spend money on themselves (e.g. on holidays) rather than save money for their children after retirement. Is this a positive or negative development?

Many people work long long hours, leaving very little for leisure activities.

In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

Scientists use living animal to carry out research. Some people think it is interesting, while some other people think it is cruel. What is your opinion?