Mrs Barett, and English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barrett. In your letter -Suggest how you could help her in her home -Say why you would like to do this work -Explain when you will and will not be available

Dear Mrs Barrett,
I’m
writing to you after reading your advertisement in the newspaper that you are looking for someone to help you during the summer. I would like to let you know that
I’m
interested in applying for
this
vacancy.
I’m
a student in my 3rd high school degree. I will have summer vacation so that I can help you in my free time. I live with my family so I am used to doing chores. If you have a garden, I will help you to water your plant every morning. I love gardening so it won’t be a difficult thing to do. I could wash your dishes by the afternoon once I finished my summer project. I can vacuum the floor and do the laundry to help you. I really want to apply for
this
opportunity because I need to buy a new laptop for my university degree. I have saved some money but
apparently
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it is still not enough. I aspire to become a programmer so the university
required
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each student to have at least a laptop with high RAM.
This
laptop is really sophisticated and well-known. It is
also
the best among
of
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all computers in the market for tech students. I will be available in the morning from 8 am until 10 am and in the afternoon from 3pm until 4pm from Monday to Wednesday. If you find that the proposed day is not suitable for your agenda, I will customise it
according to
your needs. Sadly, I can’t change the hour since I need to help my family doing chores. Hopefully, you will consider me,
I’m
a hardworking and diligent student. Look forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Dian
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task achievement
You could elaborate a bit more on why you won't be available at certain times, perhaps by giving specific chores or family commitments. This would enhance the completeness of your response.
coherence cohesion
Consider using transition words or phrases between paragraphs for a smoother flow.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear structure with a proper greeting and closing, which makes it very reader-friendly.
task achievement
Your tone is polite and appropriate for the context, making your letter effective and engaging.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph covers a single idea, contributing to the overall clarity of your letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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