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The table below shows the production of milk annualyin four countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010.

The table below shows the production of milk annualyin four countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
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The table provides information about
milk
 per year in four countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010. It can be seen that
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
Australia
 produced the highest amounts of
milk
, meanwhile,
Tanzania
 and
Guatemala
 produced much less than
other
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the other
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 two countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010. In 1990, the
Netherlands
 produced 11,262,000
liters
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litres
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 of
milk
, which is the highest
amount
 compared to
other
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the other
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 three countries, and
the
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apply
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second one is
Australia
that
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which
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 produced 11,246,000
liters
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litres
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 of
milk
.
Tanzania
 and
Guatemala
 manufactured much less
amount
 of
milk
, which is 87,000 and 26,000
liters
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litres
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 of
milk
 respectively. In 2000,
still
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still,
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 the
Netherlands
 and
Australia
 manufactured more
milk
 than
Tanzania
 and
Guatemala
, which are 11,155,000 and 11,105,000 respectively.
Tanzania
 has experienced an increase in the production of
milk
that
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which
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 is 1,42,000, and
Guatemala
also
 produced more than in the past, which is 55,000. In 2010, the production of
milk
 had a growth of 11,466,000 in the
Netherlands
,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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Australia
 experienced a decline
manufacturing
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in manufacturing
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milk
that
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which
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 is 9,165,000.
Moreover
,
Tanzania
 produced the highest
amount
 of
milk
 which is 1,55,000 compared to the past periods,
also
Guatemala
 increased the
amount
 of
milk
 which is 84,000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, netherlands, australia, tanzania, guatemala, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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