You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other. You don’t fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter -Say which points in the article you agree with -Explain ways in which your town center is different from most other town centers. -Offer to give a guided tour of your town to writer of the article
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Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing to you
for expressing
my disagreement Change preposition
to express
in
your article Change preposition
with
at
Surabaya newspaper called “Indonesia Landscape all are similar?”. I Change preposition
in
born
and lived in Add a missing verb
was born
Jakarta
my whole life, so that
I can easily say that the article was misleading.
I agree that you have a point when you wrote that North Correct word choice
apply
Jakarta
’s buildings all are alike. North Jakarta
is another city
in Jakarta
which designed by the government to tackle the erosion from rising sea level
. So that most of the skyscraper’s buildings which face the sea are carbon Fix the agreement mistake
levels
copy
from each other.
Fix the agreement mistake
copies
However
, I’m oppose
the Change the verb form
I oppose
writer
opinion who wrote that Central Change noun form
writer's
Jakarta
town center
Change the spelling
centre
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
alike
to the other Correct word choice
similar
city
. Central Fix the agreement mistake
cities
Jakarta
is my hometown, so I know that its layout and building
are highly influenced by our Chinese and Indian Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
ancestor
, which is special and unique. If you walk straight to the Fix the agreement mistake
ancestors
city
center
, you will be amazed by the red big temple which Change the spelling
centre
used
by our folks for praying. Not only that, Add a missing verb
is used
when
you see the Correct word choice
but when
surrounded
building you will find a big statue which Replace the word
surrounding
represent
our belief in Change the verb form
represents
Correct article usage
the Hindu’s
Hindu’s
God. These things you can’t find in the other Change noun form
Hindu
city
center
.
Change the spelling
centre
Moreover
, I would like to offer myself as a guide to explain the uniqueness of Central Jakarta
to your writer. I know that this
misunderstanding could be due to
a lack of exploration in my beloved city
.
I hope you will reconsider my offer. Look forward to hearing from you.
Best regards,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs are clearly divided by single ideas. For instance, separate the disagreement points from the agreement points more distinctly.
coherence cohesion
Use more transition signals to enhance the flow between sentences, such as 'however,' 'in addition to,' or 'furthermore.'
task response
Although the letter generally achieves the task, it can be improved by providing more specific examples of the unique features of Central Jakarta.
suitable writing tone
The letter is polite and respectful in tone, which is appropriate for the task.
greeting and closing
The closing is polite and offers a practical solution, which is a good way to wrap up the letter.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.