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The charts below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of
sales
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 and
rentals
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 per year of movies from an individual shop from 2002 to 2011. There are four different formats including
rentals
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,
VHS
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sales
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,
DVD
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sales
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, and
Blu-ray
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sales
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. Units are measured in
sales
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. Overview, in 2002,
rentals
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 were the highest format with around 185,000
sales
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, followed by
VHS
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, which ranked
second,
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with about 85,000
sales
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, and the third was
DVD
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 with only 45,000
sales
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, respectively.
Moreover
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, there was still no sign of
Blu-ray
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's play.
However
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, in the past ten years, there has been a downward trend for
rentals
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. It decreased continuously from 185,000
sales
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 in 2002 to just 55,000
rentals
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 in 2011.
Similarly
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, the number of
VHS
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rentals
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also
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 dropped significantly from 2002 to 2005 and began to disappear after 2006.
On the other hand
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, there was a new type of film known as
Blu-ray
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. It started rising in 2007 and increased to about 12,000
sales
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 in 2011.
Lastly
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, the number of
DVD
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sales
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 was the only group with an upward trend. It went up massively from 2002 and peaked in 2007 with 215,000
rentals
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. After that, it dropped a little to 180,000 in the latest year. In conclusion, in 2011, There were only three categories:
DVD
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,
rentals
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, and
Blu-ray
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.
Furthermore
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,
VHS
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 was no longer sold in a particular store.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, rentals, vhs, dvd, blu-ray with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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