The map shows the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015

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The map illustrates the changes in the outskirts of a city called Fosbury over 35 years, from 1980 to 2015. As it is evident, the town had undergone a great alteration in

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period of time. In 2015,

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city area became more commercial than its 1980 version. In 1980, there were vast areas of fields on the right side of the map, which were demolished by the year 2015 and replaced with warehouses.

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, the grocer’s shop was developed, turning into a huge supermarket, as there was more space

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the knockdown of the block of flats and terraced houses.

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, a car park was added close to the supermarket. compared to 1980, the left part of

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neighbourhood had become more residential by 2015. The park was relocated close to the newly constructed roundabout, giving its location to the terraced houses.

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these changes, the tennis courts were converted into a larger sports centre to be more recreational.

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this

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section of the town faced several changes shifting to a more convenient place for living, during these 35 years.

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The map shows the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015

In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problems is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?

Some people believe that the personal information of violent criminals should be made available to the public. Others think that this information should be protected. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the last few decades there have been more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media have no right to privacy. To what extent do you agree?

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.