The map shows the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015

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The map illustrates the changes in the outskirts of a city called Fosbury over 35 years, from 1980 to 2015. As it is evident, the town had undergone a great alteration in

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period of time. In 2015,

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city area became more commercial than its 1980 version. In 1980, there were vast areas of fields on the right side of the map, which were demolished by the year 2015 and replaced with warehouses.

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, the grocer’s shop was developed, turning into a huge supermarket, as there was more space

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the knockdown of the block of flats and terraced houses.

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, a car park was added close to the supermarket. compared to 1980, the left part of

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neighbourhood had become more residential by 2015. The park was relocated close to the newly constructed roundabout, giving its location to the terraced houses.

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these changes, the tennis courts were converted into a larger sports centre to be more recreational.

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this

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section of the town faced several changes shifting to a more convenient place for living, during these 35 years.

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The map shows the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015

Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is the most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?