You local council is considering closing sports and leisure that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter: • give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre • explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community • describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

#council #sports #leisure #money #friends #centre #community #effects #people

Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing to you about

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closing

this

centre

because it is useful to many people including me and my family and

also

my friends.

Firstly

, In the evening my family always go to

this

centre

for walking and my friends often exercise in the morning.

Therefore

we immensely need

thus

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centre

be exist

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there.

Secondly

this

centre

gives us a sense of community

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blong

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belong

this

city. In my opinion, If you take

such

a decision, it would affect us badly. Closing

this

centre

would be

disaster

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for both

olders

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older

and

minors

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residents. If

this

centre

closing

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, people could become less engaged in sports activities which will

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their health. I believe that question deserves close attention. Yours faithfully, Shabnam

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task achievement

Try to be more specific in how you and your family use the center, mentioning specific activities or facilities. This will strengthen your argument.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph contains a single idea and this idea is developed fully. For example, the paragraph about the community importance should be expanded with more detailed arguments.

coherence cohesion

Proofread the letter to correct minor grammatical errors and improve word choice. For example, instead of 'many people', you could say 'numerous local residents'.

task achievement

You have addressed all parts of the prompt, which shows a comprehensive response.

coherence cohesion

The closing and greeting of your letter are appropriate and polite.

Word Count

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Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

131 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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