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Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it too late to do something about it. other think that there is still time to take effective action. discuss both sides and give your opinion. give reasons for your answer and include any relevent examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Currently, plants and animals are suffering
demage
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damage
 from human activities. Some people argue that we already have no time to modify
this
 phenomenon,
while
 others contend that if we take
actions
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 right now we can minimise or even reverse the terrible outcome. I completely disagree with the opinion later, because I believe that we still have time to tackle
this
 issue. the earth's ecosystem has already been
demaged
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damaged
 heavily. There are so many species
extincted
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extinct
extinction
 during the past centuries. Some of these lives play a virtual
charactor
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character
 in
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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, so we lose the opportunity to
repaire
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prepare
repair
 food chains forever,
Besides
, authorities have different
imagination
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 about the consequences of the disappearing of plants and
animal
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animals
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. Clearly, There is no chance for them to produce
a executable documents
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.
Instead
 of those negative points of
views
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, I believe that we still have time
for balancing
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 the conflict between
human
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humans
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 and other creatures. On the one hand, the Earth is still large relative to humanity and has sufficient capacity to recover.
On the other hand
, people's
awareenss
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awareness
 is changing, and there is increasing emphasis on the rights of other living beings.
Therefore
, there is still hope for reaching some consensus on the protection of plants and animals. In conclusion, it is clear to me that we must address the problem of influence on creatures, and
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 disagree with those who argue that we have no way to cope with it.
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coherence cohesion
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Strengthen your task response by including more relevant specific examples. Drawing on concrete examples from global initiatives or specific events can illustrate your points more effectively.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction clearly outlines both viewpoints and states your own opinion, providing a clear framework for your essay.
logical structure
You provide a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument before presenting your own opinion, which is crucial for a well-rounded discussion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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