The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

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The pie charts show teenagers' favourite 3 fast-food outlets in

Vietnam

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and

Indonesia

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in the years 2017 and 2027.

It is clear that

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McDonald

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's is the most popular outlet in both of the countries,

whereas

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KFC

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and

Burger

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King are the least popular in

Vietnam

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and

Indonesia

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respectively. In 2007,

McDonald

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's was the most favourite firm in

Vietnam

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with 43,1% and in

Indonesia

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with 60,8%.

However

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, predictions say that demand for

McDonald

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's is going to increase in 2027 by 14,3% in

Vietnam

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and decrease by around the same amount in

Indonesia

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Therefore

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McDonald

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's will overtake

Burger

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King in

Vietnam

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while

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Indonesia

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it will remain in first place in

this

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competition. The other two restaurants,

Burger

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King and

KFC

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, are

also

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projected in

this

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pie chart.

KFC

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saw a rise in

Vietnam

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and

Indonesia

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by 2.2% and 15.4% respectively,

whereas

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Burger

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King saw a decline of 13.8% and 3.1% respectively. As you can see, in 2027,

KFC

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will be twice as much as demanded in 2017 in

Indonesia

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and steadily rose in

Vietnam

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Computers and A.I technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development?

Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extents do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centre or malls to do their shopping Is this a positive or a negative development?

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.