The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

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The pie charts show teenagers' favourite 3 fast-food outlets in

Vietnam

and

Indonesia

in the years 2017 and 2027.

It is clear that

McDonald

's is the most popular outlet in both of the countries,

whereas

KFC

and

Burger

King are the least popular in

Vietnam

and

Indonesia

respectively. In 2007,

McDonald

's was the most favourite firm in

Vietnam

with 43,1% and in

Indonesia

with 60,8%.

However

, predictions say that demand for

McDonald

's is going to increase in 2027 by 14,3% in

Vietnam

and decrease by around the same amount in

Indonesia

Therefore

McDonald

's will overtake

Burger

King in

Vietnam

while

Indonesia

it will remain in first place in

this

competition. The other two restaurants,

Burger

King and

KFC

, are

also

projected in

this

pie chart.

KFC

saw a rise in

Vietnam

and

Indonesia

by 2.2% and 15.4% respectively,

whereas

Burger

King saw a decline of 13.8% and 3.1% respectively. As you can see, in 2027,

KFC

will be twice as much as demanded in 2017 in

Indonesia

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and steadily rose in

Vietnam

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The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

in spite of advancements made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.